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| ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** When one tugs at a single thing in nature, he finds it attached to the rest of the world. -John Muir- I am here to give your piece,  "Remember Earth Day 2010" a review for the "Earth Day Challenge"!! "Vast Blue Seas & Oceans" (Strong Points) It was a well-written piece in my opinion. Packed with the feelings of the speaker regarding the state our world is in right now... Stating some of the problems we are experiencing as well.   Your choice of words was great, I think... although, some sound informal. I think it added more realism in the piece though.  The flow of the piece was good and the rhyming-- I enjoyed.  Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling-- Great job!!  "Convenient, Comforting Technology" (Weak Points) Couldn't find any.  "Supposed-To-Be Caretaker- Man" (Suggestions) ...None! "Wide, Warm Land Forms" (Additional Chatter) Thank you for sharing this piece to all of us, it was a fun read... I do hope that in the future we wouldn't have to worry about any pollution fees.  I remember my teacher before, joking about how we may need to pay for (buy) clean air someday... It doesn't sound that farfetched to me now though.   "KEEP WRITING & INSPIRING"~mARi~
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You responded to this review 04/25/2010 @ 9:12pm EDT