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Happy Earth Day judyastra!

What a wonderful tribute this poem is to the earth in cycle of seasons!

In a four verse poem you have captured the essence of each season both visually and emotionally. It flows fairly smoothly and the rhyme scheme is consistent and adds to the pace and soundscape.

Punctuation is natural and helpful. I wonder if a comma is needed after "isle"?

You need a question mark after "green" in verse three as you ask a question.

In the last line "for their skills to unfold" would flow better.

Overall, great compositon and images. I enjoyed the trip down round earth's outfits. Thanks for sharing your gift. *Star*.

Light on the path as you write on!

eyestar

April 22nd is Earth Day!
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