Hi mARi☠StressedAtWork

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge"  [ASR].

First Impression/Thoughts:
What a labor ... of love. A great message in a unique format.

Creativity/Impact:
The use of an acrostic is certainly a creative approach; introducing a rhyme scheme adds diffculty but makes the poem flow smoothly and adds impact. Wonderfully done.

Content:
I really enjoyed your approach to this since it points out a serious flaw in our viewpoint. "Wake up today, with the sun shining brightly Everything’s the same, nothing changes for me." The changes we face are subtle, seen day to day, and this is an important point you make up front and reiterate at the end. You then tackle the second flaw in our collective consciousness - a fear to be seen as different. "I want to have the courage to stand my ground ..." Overall, you bring to light not only the issues but our own challenges in dealing with them. A wonderfully complete poem!

Technical Notes:
Okay - you made a valiant effort in rhyming but missed a line or two especially when the lines were odd numbers. I would have liked it more if you had carried the rhyme throughout (but, I'm a rhymer by nature and practice). Since there's no requirement in this form for rhyme, I won't fault you for that. Beyond that, this poem showed a careful craftsmanship that I would expect of a poet of your stature. Excellent work.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
I see why this was chosen as the winner in past years. It's a wonderful poem done in a wonderful form. Kudos and congratulations.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you sunshine and blue skies,

Ken