Hi jaya

It's just me, Ken , and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Earth, my safe haven"  [E] on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge"  [ASR].

First Impression/Thoughts:
How beautiful! You transported be to the other sider of the globe with this enchanting vision seen through your eyes.

Creativity/Impact:
I found this totally original and captivating. Your descriptions of the Asian world are remarkable - just enough detail to entice the reader but not overdone to the point of obscuring the message.

Content:
You write to the encroachment of pollution, "from the slopes and on the glaciers of the tall Himalayas" to "the Coramandel coast along the length of
the Bay of Bengal." Your words paint an exotic picture of the splendors of this world and remind us of the beauty - oft unseen by many - that may be lost to us and to the future. What I liked most was that you presented this as a gentle but powerful warning without being "preachy." This read more as a lament, a poem, expressing grief, regret, or mourning. A wonderful write.

Technical Notes:
With a poet of your stature, I'm not going easy on you . Written in free-verse, there are few rules other than a need to retain "a poetic feel." I really read this more as prose than poetry and, I'll be honest, I can't really tell you why. That said, it was beautiful to read. From a technicas standpoint, in the second verse you wrote "is not alas! spared ..." The exclamation point is the same as a period so really, for emphasis, just set off the word "alas" in commas.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
Simply a joy to read! In spite of my hesitations, the beauty of this is deserving 5 . Thank you for sharing your vision and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you sunshine and blue skies,

Ken