*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/3510808
Review #3510808
Viewing a review of: {citem:}
Review of  
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
*LeafG*Review given on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" *LeafG*


Hi judyastra,

I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I’m reviewing your poem, "Invalid Item" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem and fits the message you are sending about protecting our trees. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This might just be me but I think the flow of the poem may be a little "off" in 2 places. There are 2 lines in your first stanza that are longer than the rest. Also, in your 4th stanza, almost all of the lines in that stanza are longer the lines elsewhere in your poem. I think that is why the flow seems a bit off to me. Again, that could just be me. The rhythm of your poem works well though. Good job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Good word choice in your poem. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Just what I noted above about the flow of the poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I really enjoyed reading your "plea" for our trees. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 04/24/2011 @ 10:02pm EDT
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/3510808