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Hi lacwitt,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Invalid Item" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title is good. Hopefully, it will open the eyes of humanity so they'll see the damage being done to our planet.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good! Just a few things that need a little "tweaking". In the last line of your first stanza, "it's" should be "its" (without the apostrophe). Also, your poem is asking questions, yet, there are only 3 question marks throughout the poem itself. This is just a suggestion but you may want to go through it and add question marks to your questions. That will keep it consistent throughout.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Just what I've noted above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I enjoyed your poem quite a bit. For a serious topic, it was a rather whimsical piece, which I thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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