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 I Want to be a California Cow  [E]
A Michigan cow writes a letter asking how to get to California to become a California cow.
by wallwriter
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear wallwriter :

I found this letter to be very cute, entertaining and funny. A poor, cold Michigan cow sees commercials on the T.V., that is placed in the barn, (and is always stuck on ESPN), that show how happy and content California cows are. Naturally, the Michigan cow and a few of his bovine buddies entertain ideas of relocating to California, so they write to a dairy for help.

These lines had me laughing out loud:

"I would try to contact one of the California Cows, but the farmer keeps his computer locked up. There may be about five of us on the trip. I wish we could fly, but I heard airport security nowadays is pretty tight." - *Laugh*

I live in California, and although some cows are free range, and have it made, many live on dairies that are probably equal to the ones in the mid west. Still, our winters are probably a bit more mild than Michigan's. When it snows here, it only snows way up high in the mountains, not on flat land like it does in the upper mid west and the north east portions of the country.

I thought this was pretty well written in that I didn't see any place that warranted a technical suggestion. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. *Smile*
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