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Stars  [E]
Just two little poems about the stars
by to.make.you.think.
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Review by Jason
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Vignette2* FEELINGS *Vignette2*
*Right*I could defiantly feel the happy fun nature of the poems. I felt like dancing or making a song to go with the poems, especially the first one. That one was my fav.

*Vignette2* THOUGHTS *Vignette2*
*Right*Great font choice. I like the purple color choice. You know what would be cool would be a picture of some stars.

*Vignette2* WHAT I LIKED THE MOST *Vignette2*
*Right*I love the first four lines on the first poem. They were very playful and happy. Actually I liked the first four lines of each stanza. They were my favorite. I think the last parts of the stanzas are good but you could do without them and it would still be fun. It would just be a couple of short words but I think it would fun.
Not that I didn't like the ending parts they were good, but not as fun in my opinion.

*Vignette2* SUGGESTIONS *Vignette2*
*Right*I noticed at the very end of the second poem you had a" }" sticking out of it. I'm not sure waht you were tring to do, maybe center it, but you should just be aware thats there.

*Vignette2* OVER ALL *Vignette2*
*Right*A happy joyful pair of poems.
I just wanted to comment on this stanza

Still leading the way
With their guiding light
As they did
For the kings
Wise men and shepherds of old

I loved the spiritual reference in this. It was all done very well. Thanks

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