Hello Early

this ghostly tale is truly scary. You have some brilliant points which made it a fine tale of creepy things.
The fact that Lumen is a very young girl at the mercy of the nightly terrors moved me.
The ghosts of children frequenting her room and mind made me see the crazy world she is thrown into.

You introduced a variety into the characters of the ghosts, namely, "the Dying One" and the "Raging one". I could see the connection between the "dying night" and the "raging" in Dylan Thomas' poem. You took the word prompts and wove a ghost tale. Brilliant!
The depiction of the dying one transforming itself into the raging devil is chilling. That means Lumen has walked into the trap and will soon be a part of the forbidden territory.

The mention of doctors shows that she is already under treatment. But I think she is far gone into her inner hell.

Dialog shows the way her mind works, actively imaginative especially creating fear.

Write on!