Hello Christina, my name is Summer wind, and I' am pleased to review your short story.

The Existence  (ASR) She held her breath for a while, waiting in the night’s stillness. #1853541 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams

My first impression, of this story, is you take the reader and introduce them to a part of the world

that practices strange rituals for ridding of ghosts and spirits. The first part of the story Crystal is

waking up and feeling a thing hovering over her. She is terrified and she thinks that whatever it is

it wants to kill her. She calls her mother who is a practicing Voodoo spiritualist, who is very upset

that she didn't sweep the house from the lingering spirits. She gives Crystal a long list of items

she will need, from sea salt, to garlic, buckets, brooms candles rose petals and the Pemba. Her

mother and her go to work cleansing every spirit through all the rituals and elements.

With her mother's reassurance and beliefs she feels she has achieved removing the spirit, but

as she is relaxed and calm she closes the door and locks it. Then, she feels the spirits bony

hand on her forehead, and it speaks to her mocking her rituals and takes over her body pulling

her up into the air, as he whispers "You forgot the back door my precious."

Summary: I felt this author wrote a spell binding, suspenseful short story.
I thought the she used vivid descriptions and believable dialogue.
I have read many of this author's stories, and I would have to say this one stands out as one of the best
that she has written. The detail and the story line is incredible.

This only my opinion, to encourage the writer, on how the story affected me.

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