My name is Jan and want to wish you a Happy Birthday on WDC. I dropped by to give you a review.

Over-all Impression:
Your description of your main character's dilemma...Lol! A very humorous little piece.

What didn't work for me:
I felt the ending was a little rushed. Perhaps a couple of lines added as he runsfor the bathroom.

Setting and descriptions:
You did well here!

Grammar, spelling, sentence structure, etc.
The use of adverbs such as "then" and "now" are frequently overused. Take the small words away and reread your sentences. If after eliminating them and your sentence remains intact, then you have succeeded with stronger sentences.
Also, use spacing between your paragraphs when posting, to make it an easier for your readers. Your story looks like one big paragraph.

The Picky Part:
Your title need's an apostrophe on the word lifts...Lift's

Please know that my suggestions are meant only to be constructive. Feel free to use any or none.

My Personal Thoughts Here:
This is a very funny account. I think with a little work, this little gem can become even better.

I came away laughing ...Thanks for sharing your story! I truly did enjoyed it. Keep on writing more things just like this!

Inker

I am a proud Reviewer of the SAJ Group.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"