Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Anniversary Review

Overall impression of piece: how do you say something new about the Lord of the universe and the lover of my soul? That is a hard assignment. I think evangelism is trying to show people what you have, and saying they can have it to

Grammatical and spelling errors: Intact

What I liked? I can't disagree with a single thing you say. He is faithful. He is more faithful than I, by a long shot. You have one rhyme and that seems to help. Personally I am always ok with free verse (since I write little else) The whole salvation plan and his caring for you personally is all here

What I disliked: It doesn't seem quite real to me. I think personal experience is probably the best. Second and Third person seems like church talk and not quite sincere. Intense momments of relieve and sustenance go a lot farther then the facts.

How the piece made me feel: It did make me smile. It has been one of those grey kind of mornings of forced retirement. I celebrated with you.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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