Hi Leila,
I read your story, here is my review. "Congratulation" on you three years with WDC.
Please remember, I'm a writer, just like you, and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.



OVERALL SENSE: Losing someone you love can be hard, especially a person you had a great relationship with. It's also comforting that so many come to give their condolences, meaning to someone who is grieving that he's important and will be missed. I have a feeling writing this down helped a little, getting a grip on your feelings and making it more real.
Life is full of surprises, some good and some bad. Hearing about your grandfather being hit by a car is not a good thing for anybody to hear. So many pictures go through a person's mind, then you hope he doesn't suffer. He's in a better place and his memory is what will comfort you now.

         TITLE: "The last goodbye " is a good title that covers your feeling fairly well.

         STYLE/VOICE: The style is personal, true story on what happened to a loved one. The voice of the author in this piece stays true and strong, explaining her feeling well.

         SCENE/SETTING: The setting is the authors home where she's hears of the news. The scene is where her mother informs her of her grandfather and they both pray he'll get better.

         CHARACTERS: The author and her family travel 248 miles to say their last good-bye

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I found no grammar or spelling errors.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: NONE This is well written.

         LIKES: I liked how you described your feelings in vivid detail making your reader feel your loss. We all go through this can't be true, this is not happening period and really don't want to let go but know you must.

         DISLIKES: I found nothing to dislike.

FAVORITE LINE(S): No school, my grandpa died in January, time of the summer holiday. No work, you get days-off when a close relative dies. I know dad was driving, mom at his side, I behind my father, and my sister behind my mother. Our places in the car haven't changed; they have been the same for more than three decades.

COMMENTs: Getting off from school usually is a fun time, but this time there is none of that happiness. You're saying your last good-bye to a loved one, your grandpa and wishing this didn't happen.
When you mentioned the sitting of your family, I have a feeling lot of families are like that too. This brings back memories on how we traveled, we each had out seating too. Good job on this. I'm hoping you're feeling better after writing this.


Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie