Hi Anna Kylie
I read your story, here is my review.
Please remember, I'm a writer, just like you, and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.

OVERALL SENSE: This is sad but oh so true that people have these thoughts of suicide. Life has been treating you bad and you lose all hope. There are other ways to deal with this than take your own life. Unfortunately, many take the easy way out, thinking there are no other options.
You gave a great beginning hook as you stay with the main character who's dealing with these voices inside her head. The ending could go either way, and I was hoping against hope she'll make the right choice. If you do the unthinkable, it's the people left behind who has to deal with the consequences of your actions.

         TITLE: The title, Soulless Whispers, fits the story faily well.

         STYLE/VOICE: The style and voice stays strong throughout the story, and deals with emotional issues.

         SCENE/SETTING: The scene and setting takes place in the main characters home, eventually the bathroom. She's comtemplating suicide and hears voices inside her head leading her down the wrong path.

         CHARACTERS: The main character is a depressed woman, who thinks she is dealing with the devil. Her life has turned upside down and she's hurting inside.

         PLOT: The main character is standing before the mirror thinking about her life, how she use to be so happy. Now, life has taken a drastic turn for the worse and she's at the end of her rope. She hears voices and gets confused as to what to do.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I found a few errors that I would like to bring to your attention.
to her own hareful words--I think you want the word hateful here.
complextion-complextion
her thoughtrs drift to the--thoughts
simaltaneously--simultaneously

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: NONE I found this story to be well written.

         LIKES: I liked how you kept it a mystery until the very end on which way your main character is going to go. The last scene is very touching.

         DISLIKES: I found nothing to dislike about this story.

FAVORITE LINE(S): That face, so pink and full before, now blotched and sunken with only the palest of colors. The whispers, "You'll never do a thing with this life," how strange that the sound of this voice resembles hers; Yet her lips move not once.

COMMENTs: This is a very vivid description that lets the reader know how bad a shape your main character has gotten herself in. She keeps thinking of all the bad stuff that has happened to her and she has fallen so far in her despair that she can't see the light or her way out of her misery.
I found this story to be heartfelt and raises a lot of issues on how people let themselves get this way. Depression a lot of times leads to suicide if you let it. I've never been depressed so I can't say what you can do in that situation. Good job,


Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie