Review of showering acts of joy member to member aralls

Why I chose this piece: Anniversary

Overall impression of piece: This looks like it could be a blog. I could give you morgue humor, but I am afraid the results might be deadly. Most places where there is a lot going on, have funny momments because they have a lot to choose from. You have these teen and preteens trying to be adults. That is funny right there, before they do anything

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked? I got the feeling there was a lot of personal explanation of your world. When it comes to hyperbole, you can exagerate. Parenthetical thought seems to work well in this case. Maybe life is a parenthesis. You talked about an abundant embarassessing momment and did it with grace and humor. I think you allowed yourself to be you

What I disliked: I think you could tie this together better (obviously better than the trousers were held up). Oprah and meditation would have quite a bit to deal with in the junior high class room. How long would they meditate on that one. Some things just are and have to be accepted

How the piece made me feel: Funny realistic are generally not things that go together. this is both. Can you fire your guargian angel? I think not. Maybe we need to learn to laugh with ours

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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