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THANKSGIVING STORY  [E]
Story poem about our activity's for the Thanksgiving holiday.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi dogpack:saving 4 premium: DWG . This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" ! *Smile* After reading "THANKSGIVING STORY"  I have the following comments to offer.

*Reading*Title:
YOUR COMMENTS This title grabed my attention, I love the holidays so I thought this would be a good read.

*Flower1*First Impression:
YOUR COMMENTS I love how you kept each part within itself.

*Quill*Flow/Showing
YOUR COMMENTS The flow is perfect in this poem. It was an easy read, that did not have any bumps to stumble over. Showing does not count in poems for me.

*Idea*Suggestions:
YOUR COMMENTS None that I can think of at this time.

*Apple*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
YOUR COMMENTS The only thing I seen was:
We write about Thanksgiving day; You have a semi colon here, yet no punctuation for any of the other lines. I would just take the semi colon out if it was me.

*Star*Things I Like:
YOUR COMMENTS I love how this Thanksgiving poem is not like all the rest. This is just about you and your thoughts on the holiday. I feel like I can see into your life through this holiday and that is pretty cool. Thank you for writing and sharing this poem.


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