Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Birthday

Overall impression of piece: This is beautiful. there is a poetry to the seasons. A poet's eye picks that out and sees the choreography that is life. Interesting, is it not. There are things that even happen in adult forms as kids grow up. Every family thinks they are inventing this all over again. They are not.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked? This reads well. I had to read it a couple of times to figure out the rhyme. Certainly is not obtrusive, and is still effective. We think we are so busy with our young. We have no idea what it is like in the animal world. Walabeys carry around their young for a year until baby is almost 1/4 Mom's size. She can nurse one in the pouch, one out of the pouch and have one in uterus all at the same time. Imagine toting around a 30 pound baby

What I disliked: viscious cycle is borderline cliche. I don't really know about your personal feelings about them. Seem kind of objective in your outlook

How the piece made me feel: Pretty much covered everything in previous sections. This is a dance and everyone knows their parts. A picture would help.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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