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Title: This House

Author: thetrwebster

Type: Poem


I have two different feelings about the poem. First, it is well written and makes a strong statement about life and how the speaker feels repressed. A such itdraws a strong connection between what we expect home to be like, and how it actually is. My other impression is that though the bulk of the poem is, as I stated, that recurring "This house..." becomes repetitive and strains the message, directing the reader to that repetition instead of to your message.

That aside, it captures those varying emotions. It's about life and the feelings one has when their expectations aren't being met. In a way, the poem is about inaction. For it seems the speaker is forever waiting, but never achieving. I do know something about that, or at least my equivalent. It's difficult to rise above our environment sometimes, we have people and situations who want to keep us at their level, to force the status quo. Change is not welcome to them. The house tends to take on the mood of those in it, and becomes a symbol for all those things that have gone on in it. It actually seems to take on a personality, well seemingly, lol.

I had someone once tell me my family home was toxic, that whenever I went there I became whatever it was/they were. And to a degree they were right. So the key, I guess, is breaking free. You need inner strength for that, something I have lacked at times.

Some of your lines are very intriguing. One example is this couplet:

This house sheltered me in Winter
was a prison in Summer.

It shows two sides to family dynamics, where it can have both a positive and a negative side. It does provide that base for security of your basic needs, but at the same time, keeps you from being, or doing what you wish to do.

There are other quality passages here, and it made for an odd mix, those well-written lines contrasting the repetitive ones. I did like the poem, especially the meaning and the subtlety of your words, I just think a little less repetition would help.




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