Hi,Beka!

My name is Jan and want to wish you a Happy Anniversary on WDC. I dropped by to give you a review on "Alex Confesses".

I liked your story and your title is fitting.

Over-all Impression:
An eye-opening exploration of the heart ache of accepting one's gender
and then wanting parents to understand and give their approval.


What I liked the best about your story:
The emotion and inner thoughts of Alex. This gives the reader what is
happening in her mind and makes your story so clear.

My Favorite Lines!
"She stopped crying. What if they’re confused and scared, too? I did just kind of spring this on them. Maybe they just need time. And more information!" This shows a mature teen who tries very hard to help her parents understand.


Your Tone and Mood:
Sad, emotional and wanting Alex to come away with understanding from her parents.

What I liked the best:
The wisdom of this teenager and trying her best to understand them also.
This makes your plot so strong.

Characters:
Alex is a strong character. You know who she is and what she herself understands about her gender. Her parents are the typical confused adults under these circumstances.

Plot:
Alex sets out to confess to her parents what her plans are, after graduation from
high school. She knows what she wants and is trying to convince her parents.

Setting and descriptions:
Very nice in your imagery and visuals.

Dialog, if any:
Perfect in that it tells your story in a natural way and carrys your story to the
surprising climax. You had good rising and falling action and your story was
carried from beginning to end with conviction.

Grammar, spelling, sentence structure, etc.
All good!

Your Bravery:
You decided to put it out there and I feel your heart is lighter for it!There's light at the end of the tunnel and now there are clearer skys ahead.


Please know that my suggestions are meant only to be constructive. Feel free to use any or none. Here are some suggestions you might consider:

My Personal Thoughts Here:
The teen years are hard enough, but having to carry a secret is way too much
to carry. I know first hand, because I have a gay son. Your story was written
well and you bring this subject home. Adults need to listen to their children!
If the love is there, the family will survive!

I came away with a good feeling ...Thanks for sharing your story! It has given me more understanding of this highly controversial subject. Keep on writing more things just like this! I truly wish you the best!

Inker

I am a proud Reviewer of Showering Acts of Joy and the WDC's Power Group.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"