Hi Litoralis
I carefully read your story, here is my review.
Please remember, I'm a writer just like you and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.

OVERALL SENSE: Your story on what could happen to earth is scary to think about. Of course, there is always a possibility to have an asteroid hit us, but I don't know if I would want to be saved from it as what happened to your main character. It doesn't sound like a very happy life for me when everything as you know it is gone. What is there to be happy about? Yeah, I survived, now what?
Your main character has a dilemma on his hands. He's lucky to be picked to be saved from destruction, but what is he leaving behind? His beautiful wife who he loves dearly, the beautiful scenery on earth that he will fondly remember, his friends and family and for what? Where do you go from here?

         TITLE: "The Last Survivor" is a great title for this story and lets the reader know what he'll be reading about.

         STYLE/VOICE: The style is a futuristic fantasy and the voice deals with the main character as he comes to grips of being the one saved from earth's destruction.

         SCENE/SETTING: The scene and setting takes place in the year of 7462. It is April 17 at 12pm when the main character is close to death. He’s in the Engineer Quarters C803 where he’s recording what he has seen and knows of what happened 5450 years ago. You begin to wonder where on earth did he go to, which planet that he can live that long? His life-span has become longer, but how?

         CHARACTERS: The main character isn't named but this is who the story revolves around.

         PLOT: There's a scare on earth, an asteroid, the size of Delaware is heading downward and earth is directly in its path. How do you prepare for such devastation? They planned a Project Exodus which is kind of similar to what happened when Noah’s Ark was built to save so many different kinds of species. This is what they are doing this time around, so many people are saved and are training for what is to come.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I found a few errors that I would like to bring to your attention.
They manage to pool that many resources.--They managed to pool Managed with "ed" added to it
Order was restored was when the government--Was is used too close together in a sentence.
the heavens, and wondered.That is how--Spacing error
the gentic requirements--Genetic is misspelled
look in that mans eye when the light--Man's with an apostrophe to show ownership of the noun eye
"I know its gonna be tough--It's with an apostrophe, a contraction of the two words it is
Eden was the superdrive--Separate these two words super and drive.
worlds most famous and brilliant minds --World's with an apostrophe
every physicist, chemist, and mathmatician who had ever earned a Ph.D--Mathematicial is misspelled & Ph.D. should also have a period after the D. or none at all PhD
couln't give a damn--You forgot the "d" in couldn't
Over and over I wish that I could see have those minutes back--Redo this sentence, I'm thinking eliminate the word see
the plexiglas and --Plexiglas should be capitalized because it is a Proper Noun and a trade name.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: Maybe proof-read more to catch these mistakes.

         LIKES: That is quite an image you created in this story of how the earth will look if met with this kind of destruction. Very scary stuff!

         DISLIKES: I found nothing to dislike.

FAVORITE LINE(S): My favorite lines in your story that I highlighted shows which ones moved this story along the best. I will then quote you on the lines I picked and comment on why I liked them.

          QUOTE HERE: It all looks good on paper, and they built it, but they never could imagine what it is like, to see asteroids pass by so closely that they look like a stream rather than individual masses. They also could never imagine the sounds that sub-quartile fission makes. I have long since stopped hearing it, but it drove some of us mad.

          My Comment: This is where I figured out it wasn't the best thing ever to be chosen surviving this kind of catastrophe. I don't think we're meant to see anything this powerful as this asteroid so close up. It boggles the mind and then the sound of it must have been. Not good! These sentences brought it to full understanding of what it could be like. This would not be for me at all.

          QUOTE HERE: I never thought that one day my bones might be put up in a museum, maybe none will ever read these words. I am not sure I want anyone to ever find this, let our race die. Let our secrets die with us. Perhaps that is perfect, that all that ever was for us will be nothing once more.

          My Comment: What a futuristic look on things! I found these sentences fascinating as to how we would look to others that'll come along after we die many years in the future. What will they think of us and how we lived. Who will come later on, some other race? I can see this main character thinking, to let his race die. He doesn't sound very proud of what was accomplished and I can't say I blame him for this kind of attitude.

JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION:This gave me quite a thorough look into the future through your eyes. You created a great plot and storyline for your readers. Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece.




Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie