Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Birthday

Overall impression of piece There is some rather intense imagery here. Not only could I see it, I could feel it also. Those are hallmarks of good writing.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok; very readable.

What I liked? I look at human interaction nd wonder how these things get started and keep going. There is a chemistry, but there are emotions that change us and make us different. We are melted and melded to those. No one can explain this is totality. They just are.

What I disliked: Kohl rimmed doesn't translate to my male perspective. Did google things. Kohl's is a department store in the USA. Saw an illusion to cosmetics and I think this is where we are going. Dark rimmed ornate eyes, cry from a river of pain perhaps

How the piece made me feel: I really like that you can talk of the mysteries of life, without calling them mysteries. I feel I have lived them with you.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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