Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Anniversary

Overall impression of piece: My first thought was that y ou can't do this, but on second thought, not so bad. It certainly was unique. It is certainly reminiscent of Frost's, a road less travelled.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked? Good description of scene . I like munchkin land and the yellow and red swirl. Life really can be that random I think. A lot of our investments seemed like a good idea at the time and we look back and wonder, what were we thinking? Your think about creatures all wanting a name seems pretty appropriate. They never knew they could, and when they could be individuals, they went for it. Conclusion seemed realistic. I am glad she didn't have to call 911 or have an ambulance on the red brick road.

What I disliked: Why is she on this road, other than it is interesting. Original was kind of a fable tied to th e gold standard that was hotly contested. Maybe that is enough for her, but in terms of of developing the story, there has to be some reason, other than eating bad vegetables. Obviously, there is much more to the story. I think Dorothy is the original learns something every step of the way. I am not quite getting that.

How the piece made me feel: Who is on our journey with us? What did we learn together? I think that these are all key elements of a journey type of story. Each of Dorothy's co conspirators had qualities and flaws. That kind of is what human nature is all about. I th ink that is what superior story developement is all about.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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