Hi Lady Katie-Marie -Published :)
I carefully read your story, here is my review. May I congratulate you on your eight years with WDC.
Please remember, I'm a writer just like you and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.

OVERALL SENSE: I've read two chapters so far of your interesting storyline. You have a strong main character that carries the story along very well. Later on into the second chapter, we meet another character who seems just as strong. Will they be enemies or friends? Time will tell as the reader reads on into this wonderful world of dark fantasy. The beginning paragraphs of both chapters are catchy, drawing the reader into Twyfel's world. Unfortunately, she wants to die, but can't seem to find anyone to do the job. Living between being half human, if that, and part wraith. She is torn between both worlds. She doesn't want to eat the souls of humans so goes mostly hungry more times than not. It's an interesting plot that I will definitely continue reading.

         TITLE APPEAL: "The Hungering Shadows" is an interesting title that drew me in. The author is writing this as a NaNoWriMo attempt 2012. Good job so far on the chapters I’ve read.

         STYLE/VOICE: I believe the style of this story is a dark fantasy. The voices stays strongly with Twyfel as she fight her inner demons.

         SCENE/SETTING: The scene and settings differ as these chapters are read. In chapter two, Twyfel is now lingering next to a village in which she saved a villager from the last feeding of the wraiths. He was half alive and she couldn't partake in ending his life so she took him to the next village and laid him in front of a tavern's door for other human's to attend to making him better.

         CHARACTERS: The main character is Twyful. I'm not really sure what she is, half human and a shadow wraith of sorts The human she saves in the first chapter intrigues her. This leads into spying on him. He feels her staring at him and he notices her lingering outside the window of the tavern. A relationship of sorts begins where they are still very much antagonistic with each other.
Sceadwraiths are also mentioned who feed on human in the villages.

         PLOT: The story begins with Twyful, she's fighting her hunger, not wanting to be like the other Sceadwraiths. She has two different emotions…She wants to partake in devouring the souls of the villagers, but her human side keep intervening. She feels so different from the others and is disgusted at what she has become.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I didn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: NONE

         LIKES: I like these two chapters very much. They have an originality about them that I find interesting.

         DISLIKES: I didn't find anything to dislike.

FAVORITE LINE(S): Yes, I do have some favorite lines that I would like to highlight from the two chapters I have read so far. I will comment on why I liked them and how I feel they add to the storyline.

          QUOTE HERE: The wind howled like a thousand specters through the trees, striking Twyfel with an aching hunger. She hadn’t eaten for weeks and every sound and sight brought to mind the smooth, tingling taste of a delectable meal. Gazing down the dark valley, the hiss of the bitter midnight wind glanced from her already ice cold skin before plunging down towards the banquet below. In the valley’s nook nestled the weak twinkling lights of a once idyllic village, its slumbering peace torn by screams of horror and fear.

          My Comment: I didn't mean to highlight the whole opening paragraph of the first chapter, but it's so good. The description grabs the reader in while you're curious at the same time at what could be happening.

          QUOTE HERE: In a rickety looking bed, covered by a thin, patch worn blanket, sat the man she’d rescued the night before. His back was resting against the wall. A wooden bowl and spoon was in his hands which contained some sort of thick broth which he played with rather than ate, his gaze dark and brooding.

          My Comment: Twyful seems drawn in by this man she saved. First of all, she is still torn up about why she did such a thing, now she can't seem to make up her mind on why she seems so taken by him. She still wants to take his soul, because he's just a weak human. But the human side of her seems to be alive and well. This leaves her with a curiosity that gets the better of her.

JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION: Another fantasy with a great plot that I've found intriguing; meaning, I will continue reading on to the next chapters. Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece.




Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie