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 | Confessions of a Jilted Bond Girl  [13+] Pretty Girl on Beach gets left behind by the dashing superspy  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  This review is part of your shower from Showering Acts of Joy. Please note - any suggestions are my personal opinion. Feel free to use them or ignore them. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Title: "Confessions of a Jilted Bond Girl" Author: Hayley I. (aka Kilpik) Reviewed by: KerrieAnnS How I came by your work: Happy Anniversary my fellow SAoJ member  First Impression: Such a strange piece, but throughout my lips keep twitching into a smile. Very cleverly written. Story line / Theme: A bond girl who admits to being in a movie, but instead of being an actress who walks away, she is trapped in a movie scene. Characters: We have the infamous James Bond and one of his many bond girls, emphasised by the fact she gets no name. Writing Style/ Narrative Voice: This is written in the first person throughout and I find no fault. It's a good voice to use here as it is her description of the scenery and situation as well as her emotional response that builds teh story. All of her accounts mean more because they are from her, not for her. Setting: The main setting is the picturesque beach, there is a car chase but there is no description of any part of the scenery they pass. I think this is a good idea as it leaves only the beach, which helps make her seem all the more isolated in the same place. Descriptions: You have brilliant descriptive language. I have highlighted some of my favourites: Testosterone-fueled battering ram wondrously whimsical an excited bumblebee giddy, war-mongering magician You really show the bond girls disdain at her situation with colourful language, such as; blasted beach discarded like a piece of trash god-forsaken stretch of sand Emotional Reaction: I find this piece amusing, I felt particularly satisfied when she discards his request and embraces her situation with a new insight. Beginning and End: As we start she has already lost hope: Not much happens for me once the opening credits crash in and I'm not holding my breath. But after we explore how she came to be abandoned there is a reprieve as she has the last word. By deciding to stay on the beach she is no longer trapped. It is her decision, so she wins. What I liked most: How you mixed reality with fiction. She is a character not an actress, but she is talking about the story as a movie: opening credits They call it cinema cinema authorities 27th sequel She doesn't cross the line over to reality/actress as she mentions: They tell you it’s “forbidden” at Character School Suggestions: I find nothing to change in this piece, it is well written and I find no errors. Conclusion: A clever and funny short story playing on a subject well known to many. Well done and please keep writing    WRITE ON {image: ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** }
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