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 Does true love exist?  [13+]
Do you really think Love exist in this world of our's
by Adefolahan Bashirdeen Adeyemo
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi Adefolahan Bashirdeen Adeyemo -

As a newer member of this site, I wanted to take a moment to welcome you to Writing.Com. Today is actually my 10th anniversary of being a member here, and I'm celebrating by hosting "SoCalScribe's 10th Anniversary Gala"  and giving away several prizes throughout the day. I've selected you as a recipient of one of 10 reviews I'm handing out today, which also comes with 10,000 Gift Points for you to spend as you please. *Smile*

I'm enclosing the following review for your consideration, but please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of them as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Bullet* I think there's a lot of truth to the attributes to true love that you've listed. This is clearly a well-developed thought and the item really makes the reader stop and think about which of those elements are present in or missing from their own relationships. *Thumbsup*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Bullet* TYPO: "Yes, true love [definitely] exists, but it isn't how most people think it is."

*Bullet* Having two separate numbering schemes in the item was a little confusing. Since you're listing the same thing (attributes of true love), I think you might be better off clarifying them with one cohesive list rather than two separate ones.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I like the concept of this piece and can tell you put a lot of thought into the content. Combining the two separate lists into one complete list will make things a little more streamlined, but other than that, it was an enjoyable, informative read. Well done!


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Keep up the good work and keep writing!

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