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World Builders, LLC  [E]
Creating worlds in your image, one day at a time.
by Jeff
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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(Disclaimer: any opinions are strictly my own, to do with as you will. Keep what you find helpful, toss the rest with yesterday's paper)

This quick little exploration reads like something by Douglas Adams, or Kurt Vonnegut. The language is witty and intelligent, but at the same time simple, honest, and effective. It's folksy and adds a touch of believability to your narrative.

The title and intro are both solid.

I would have like a reference to dieties as being supreme powers, with all the time in forever, and still cheap (expletives).

The premise to this piece is very entertaining. The narrative is well thought out. You fully develop your idea through the course of the short peice. It's a very readable work. The last line is spot-on.

I picture this as becoming part of a series of 'alternative' companies. Thinks like Vampire Slayers R Us or Mistake Erasers, LTD

I have noted no errors.

Thankyou, as always, for sharing your talent and wit. Write On!


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