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Hi Gelendra,
Happy Birthday! I know it's a little early, but here is your Birthday Review.
Remember this is just my opinion, take what you can and leave the rest. I am a writer also.
The over all feeling I get from your story is somber.
I feel the sentiment you feel for your grandmother, you love her still.
This is a really good short story. You communicated your feelings well. There were some things I would edit.
" On the far horizon there were some purple hills. And above that, a large puffy cloud formation that seemed to fill the sky." I would make this one sentence, putting a comma between "hills, and above that, a large puffy cloud formation that seemed to fill the sky."


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .