Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Birthday

Overall impression of piece This is an adventure. If I had my picture on file, you would know I was not a marathonner. I certainly admire the adventure.

Grammatical and spelling errors: 6.50 is non standard for time in my part of the world. It may be fine for where you are from

What I liked? Pretty impressive undertaking and the time for a first timer is pretty good. It is kind of amazing what an oxugen deprived brain will think about. It seems like a first timer always has delusions of grndeur. You finished. That is pretty impressive.

What I disliked: In the kit is non standard usage of which I have no knowledge. Nairobit may be standard for you, but an international audience would want more detail about running there. Self actualization is really what the whole piece is about, but you never really talk about it. I would put detail about that.

How the piece made me feel Pretty inspiring tale. I could see a market for this. Maybe that is how it should be aimed to inspire others.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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