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Hi hypermommy ,

Happy Birthday from WDC

The Heart of the Story/Poem:
You set up your main characters well. Giving back ground and present day details of what type of relationship they have. A tale of two women one of which is losing her work mate,and friend. Susan is reliving her emotions of a prior friend she lost and takes it out on her current friend she is losing. They finally get things resolved at the end with a bluetooth and all is well.

Things That Might Make It Better:
Maybe more description of what the main characters look like.

Things I Like:
Susan’s chair crashed to the floor as she jumped from it. This is a very vivid picture of someone angry and flying out of a chair really fast. Good Job.
Continue to write. You are a good story teller.

Grace L
"Showering Acts of Joy Group" 

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