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 The Wind  [E]
My attempt at a Haiku.
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Review of The Wind  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece: Anniversary

Overall impression of piece Nice format. Seem to have structure and subject down well

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked? Always like an explanation I am not a form kind of creator, but I marvel at the discipline of doing this.

What I disliked Format is good. Kind of leaves me a little flat. I think there is more. See below.

How the piece made me feel I always get the feeling of mystery from reading these types of work. I am missing it here. Maybe something like winds in my veins. Don't count syllables...sorry

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