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Hi Sara Kate ,

Happy Birthday from WDC and SAJ

The Heart of the Story/Poem:
A young adult looking in retrospect at their childhood.

Things That Might Make It Better:
I suggest that you change the blurb from, passed away the day I turned 18, to something more mysterious. I think it may draw more readers into your piece. I think it may lead readers to believe it is about death, unless that is what you intended.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
NONE

Things I Like:
I like the voice you gave to childhood. The voice was as if she/he is a person. The lesson learned and and the regrets are real and relate-able. You have expressed well the frustration, conflict and transition from a young teenager to a young adult.

You are a great writer and I suggest you keep writing. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your work.

Grace L
"Showering Acts of Joy Group" 

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .