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Review #3894174
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Bi-polar Disorder--Friend or Foe?  [13+]
3rd place Bipolar Editorial Contest
by Pat ~ Rejoice always!
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi, Miss Pat.

First of all, let me wish you a very happy birthday. You make the WDC shine with your contributions and I am glad to know you.

*Sun**Waterdrop**Sun*

Message Conveyed

Before coming to WDC, I was not aware of bipolar disorder. I asked many other people in my area; they were unaware too. As per them, the constant mood fluctuations is because of the short-tempered nature of the person. I'm sure people here, in my circle, are still unaware about the disease or the fact that t can be controlled by medication.

After reading this pieces I felt that your children are lucky to have parents like you. The message that you conveyed is clear in the piece. It explains your fear for children.

Although I must confess I was confused by the title. I thought you were going to show some positive side of the bipolar disorder too.

*Sun**Waterdrop**Sun*

Language and Grammar

The words you have written are soulful. I can see that this piece is very personal. It takes a lot of courage to put your thoughts in words and bare your problems to the world.

The piece is very well-edited. There was only a small error as per me. In the phrase my husband and I, the "I" should be me. (It's been extremely difficult for me.)

*Sun**Waterdrop**Sun*

Other thoughts and Suggestions

This piece was written in 2008. I hope things have grown better now. I'm proud to count you as a friend and guide.

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