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It was a real pleasure reading your work and I am glad to give you some impressions I had of your story and a short review.
 
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Overall Impression
 
The tension on Dread Lake escalates as Kenneth goes from rocking the boat to discovering that there is no gas in the tank. Stacy is terrified of being out in the lake and the prospect of being stranded is more than she can take. Every part of the scene is turning dark and ominous and the reader is hurdled headlong into a violent engagement with evil.
 
Interest and Pace
 
Stacey is the center of interest in this story. She has been abused and it is quickly evident that the men in her life are bent on being a torment. Even her brother seems to care more about his jolly good time than about his sister’s emotional wellbeing. I appreciate how gripping the story is right from the beginning and my sympathies are immediately with Stacy. There is no stopping once the reader gets into the story for the pace moves along at a swift rate to a dramatic and terrifying conclusion.
 
Structure and Clarity
 
The plot line is well thought out from the very beginning of the story and develops rapidly as it is evident that everything in nature and mankind is ready to get Stacy. The story builds beautifully to the point where of course Kenneth is going to have to swim to the boat house and of course Waldrick, Stacy’s ex, is going to do him in. Every part of the story is clear and well-structured so that when the inevitable happens the escalation in the plot to include more danger for Stacy, while a surprise, is terrifyingly believable.
 
Edits/Revisions
 
I was not aware of any edits or revisions that would improve your story.
 
Summary
 
The day on the lake for Stacy turns dramatically evil as she is trapped by the negligence of her brother and the demented designs of her ex-husband. Trapped between the lake on fire and her tormenter turned executioner headed for the other side of the lake, Stacy’s fate seems to be complete destruction. Her fear and terror seem to be taking her down as fast as what may become her fate and my journey with her is vividly chilling.
 
I enjoyed the emotions that your story invoked in my heart and mind. The words took my soul on a ride that stirred up the “defender” in me. Thank you for the great read.
 
Cheers!
~Kenword~
 
 
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