Hello CJ Reddick ,

I am reviewing your work as a judge for "CLASH! "  [13+]. The following are all my opinions for you to heed or discard as you please.

Character:

What I like:I liike that she is an independent soul with a clear-cut mission in life.

What I'd like to see improved upon: I hate, as a reader, being told how to pronounce a character's name. Slso, there is just too much info that I would rather learn through the narration of the story.


Story:

What I like: I particularly appreciated the conflict between Alexa and Gula. It adds an additional layer to the character.

What I'd like to see improved upon:I was quite bored by the bus ride.


Good luck in the tournament.

Best regards,

Gary


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .