Hello ,

I am reviewing your work as a judge for "CLASH! "  [13+]. The following are all my opinions for you to heed or discard as you please.

Character:

What I like: Just the facts. That is all I need to know moving on to the story.

What I'd like to see improved upon: A little over-the-top on the nasty.


Story:

What I like: There is not a lot of extraneous chatter in the narration.

What I'd like to see improved upon: The character has no obstacles to overcome. Everything she does is too easy. I also don't care for present-tense narration.


Good luck in the tournament.

Best regards,

Gary


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .