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 Wanderer's Desert Race against Saoirse  [13+]
This is my Round 1 entry of Wanderer for the 2nd Tournament of the Clash! Contest.
by Jakrebs
Review by Zelphyr
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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The musical setup for the language is pleasantly different from the norm, and the character overall is interestingly mystical and Romanesque for a science fiction story, despite feeling a tad out of place. Wanderer's confusion about "race" is amusing, as are the soft little pokes at the forth wall.

Something I am wondering: if he is a teacher and historian, I'm curious what he did to be placed under arrest. It's effective for limiting him to a reasonable level, but without an explanation, it seems a bit contrived. Then again, in light of those little forth wall pokes, that might not quite so bad.

An interesting read, in any case. I'm curious to see how things will play out.

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