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 This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group" I am reviewing your work as a disABILITY WRITERS GROUP family member, as a PDG member graduate of the Rockin' Review Academy & "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Christ's Mass Stopped me as I was scrolling through the items in your portfolio under the poetry file. I like poetry and am a follower and believer in God and Jesus Christ. Because He, Jesus is the reason for the season in my heart, I needed to find out what you had written about Christ's Mass. Description: Christmas is about caring for others, gathering together as Christ's Mass. (Contest Entry) I like what you wrote in your description because Of caring for others and gathering together as as Christ's Mass. What I get from this is that you think helping people and caring about them and for them is important in the way that God, out heavenly father and His son Jesus Christ of Nazareth cares for us and helps us by showing through His example how we should be with each other and treat each other. This is what I need to read and review based on what I believe you conveyed through your title and description. I also was excited to learn that you wrote this as a contest entry, however, I was disappointed that there was nothing written in the description letting me know which contest this was written and entered into, so perhaps this happened because of the character limitations.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS So awesome and heart warming, just what Jesus would do for someone in need.  I LIKE What and why: Wow, I'm nice and warm from reading your poem because it is a picture of exactly what my savior Jesus would do for anyone who is in need. The Christmas spirit is still cheering me up and making me smile even though it has been two weeks ago that we celebrated Jesus birthday and made merry sharing gifts with family and friends. You gave my spirit an uplifting experience through your word art by showing how this celebration can bring joy to many people, families, and especially those people and families who are in need of a helping hand. plot: The idea of a family having a nice warm place with togetherness celebrating Christmas at it's best, while another family struggles to keep warm in the winter storm is a very realistic and thought provoking plot. Giving an equal part for both sides of the story gave the events a balanced view of how real life happens because of the need for balance of universal events. This is a good example of how there is good and bad, light and dark, and without balance things would tip over. Your story is also a good example of how people should be and do for one another all year. So when there is unbalance by doing good when there is an abundance of bad, things are returned to normal again and life goes on to repeat history, that is unless we the people learn from history and decide to not repeat the past. I have hope that someday there will be more people wanting to do the right thing. Your poem shows that there is hope. Rhythm: For me I can find a bouncy rhythm in your poem in the beginning three verses and then it seems to change to a more serious note requiring a slower less bouncy pace as the rest of your poem story unfolds. When the beginning is jovial and the rest is more serious and subdued it is done well I think because the division is even and both sides of the story get an even focused attention span from you as well as for the reader, nice work and thought.  OBSERVATION(S) Balance is good, and makes the story an equal opportunity reading experience.  QUESTION(S) Is there any truth which helped you conceive of this story?  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: I've read your poem several times. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: The second verse (paragraph)second stanza (sentence) for me would benefit with the beginning word, Sending because you write using plurals in the first two sentences or stanzas. When I read this aloud, it works better for me also.  CONCLUSION(S) Nice poem! My thoughts and Impressions: Yes, you are absolutely correct, that our father in heaven cares for us and takes care of us especially when the need for balance to be righted is a gift he can give to people in need and wanting for the basic things of life. I can relate to this situation because I have had needs and God through his son Jesus has met them for me. Another gift and joy for me is the fact that you make the point of prayer which is powerful, and show how the family is helped miraculously because they are spotted outside in the snow by a family who has all the comforts of shelter, a fire and food. Thank you for sharing your writing with me and allowing me to read and review for you. I very much appreciate reading content which tells of God and Jesus. Sharing your words is giving gifts to readers , so keep on doing what you do best and all else will follow in order and you will be blessed. Safe travels and many blessings. Your words I believe are a joy to the lord. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"    Paper Doll Gang review, "Invalid Item" especially for you.   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"    The "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" are out in force today raiding the ports of WDC for WDC 13th anniversary! Please enjoy!  Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item"  Join us for some coffee and conversation in the "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! 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