Hi there len_gray ! "Gasp!" your being reviewed by a newbie of The Talent Pond! I am reviewing

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Personal Impression I like it personally. It does stir up memories but not forcefully making me all weird.

Tone & Mood there were only two ruff spots in it and I set those below for the most it was great It had great tone and the mood wasn't depressing.

Rhyme, Form & Flow It did rhyme every other line there were two lines that needed help. The form was correct and the flow was good.

Emotional Impact I really liked the ending it feels so right. I believe you have great imagery I didn't have any problems with understanding it.

Grammar/Punctuation
I pried and tried.
I looked far and wide.
Alas no bad grammar,
Could this Grammar Nazi find! (Please excuse my poor attempt at humor but it is true!)


Yet still their opinion strikes
Without mercy, they diagnose
All of my rebellion, all of my likes
The paths I walked, but never chose <--- Try Host instead of chose = but never could host

One day, by curious chance
In the mirror darkly, I did see
Nothing of their voice <--- try romance instead of voice = Nothing of romance
But so very much of me

Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your poem Whatever another person says -- especially me -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion You are the only one who can decide what is right for your poetry.

Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. Please keep on writing more things just like this!








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