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| I am reviewing your work as a disABILITY WRITERS GROUP family member, as a PDG member graduate of the Rockin' Review Academy & "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: How to Give from Your Home reminds me of the people who covenanted with God and took on the name of Jesus. As part of this covenant they agreed to take on the burdens of each others lives, help each other, and sustain and lift each other up in spirit as well as in the realm of the physical world. The title would be more like How To Give From Your Heart. Because giving and taking on the challenges and burdens of and for other people is a very important need and something which God asks us to do for each other, I wanted to see what ideas and experiences you have to offer concerning this subject. Description: Most of us have things around our home that we could give to help others. Is a most wonderful and profound statement because scripture tells us to help one another, share each others burdens, and sharing what we have as our increase with God and friends, family, neighbors. This for me is a team effort which the key words "help" and "love each other as a family" is an attention grabber for me. I had to find out what you meant about giving from our home and helping people so I made the decision to read your word art.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS  I LIKE What and why: I like the idea of giving from the home, heart and spirit. plot: Absolutely this is a good story about how our throw away society does not have to throw away as much good items which other people can use and which will enrich their lives. If you do not have, then whatever you receive is a wonderful gift and a treasure. The idea of sharing information about sharing and giving to other is one of the greatest stories and adventures we can be active in through reading and doing. Your word art shows the who, what, when, where. why and how elements of writing content that is a very good guide through the ideas and knowledge of the writer to the reader. Rhythm: While reading the information you want to share with me, thank you, I was comfortable with the layout of the information, the rhythm of the different categories, how you presented your word art, and didn't have any bumps or glitches during the reading process. I would have felt more closer and connected to your words and events you showed me if you have mentioned through out this content some of your experiences and feelings about what you were writing. This would being more of you and the reader into the subject of which you are passionate about. Also, it would make your writing more memorable for the reader. The rhythm would be similar to being shown a movie in which the viewer/reader would feel more involvement and possibly feel like they were a part of the events. This involvement would distract the reader from reading and therefore they would be into the rhythm of events and unaware they were reading. This is what writers strive to do for the reader. You are well on your way to having a smoothly flowing work of word art.  OBSERVATION(S) This is a very good cause and weel worth writing about.  QUESTION(S) Have you considered adding more to your word art and showing the reader, by placing the reader into the events, more of how this has affected you and how you have reacted or responded to the information you are sharing?  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: This is treasure which will help people think about and act upon the information you wrote and shared with them. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: Another version for the title could be, How to Give from Your Heart and Home, because when you give from your home, you are also giving from your heart and I think that giving from the heart is most important. Also giving from the home does not always mean a physical place such as a building or house. Your heart is a home for your kindness, sharing , giving of time and energy and for other good and not so good emotions and thought processes. I have limited finances for example, so I give of my time, energy, and spirit so I can help people by being a friend, listening to them when they have the need to talk, sharing information about different types of resources, helping with different projects, and more as the opportunity presents the need to act. When I am able to help by giving away things I do this which you wrote about and shared well with me giving me some ideas. You could write another article or add to the information you have already written explaining other ways to give away from the heart and spirit. I believe this would make a huge difference it the quality of information, help people see more ways they can be helpful by giving, and give the reader more possibilities to think about and act upon. When you mention the church reusing the clothing, I think about another way to make this statement which would be more powerful to the cause of sharing with people what we don't want, can not use, or don't like for some reason. I would use the word "re-purpose' for things like furniture and for clothes I would use " The church could give the clothes to people who need them or sell them to raise funds. Or you could the church would offer the clothes to people in need for another example. Churches and other organizations that help people in need also can distribute or offer these lightly used cell phones which are a blessing for people who have disABILITIES, small to teen children, and other uses and reasons that people will have better and safer lives from the gift of giving cell phones.  CONCLUSION(S) Good job and very thoughtful of you to share this information and allow me to review for you, thank you. My thoughts and Impressions: You have given me cause to think about and consider what I can do to help other people who are in need. I'm very glad you wrote about this topic and shared with readers. Please let me know how things are going and if I can help you with a project. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"    Paper Doll Gang review, "Invalid Item" especially for you.   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"    The "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" are out in force today raiding the ports of WDC for WDC 13th anniversary! Please enjoy!  Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item"  Join us for some coffee and conversation in the "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! 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