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| I am reviewing your work as a disABILITY WRITERS GROUP family member, as a PDG member graduate of the Rockin' Review Academy & "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Ways to Tighten up Your Writing grabbed me hook line and sinker because I like learning how to write to my very, very best ability. Improving this skill is important to me, so I had to read your word art on word art. Description: Eliminating 'state of being' and 'helping' verbs as much as possile You left out the letter b in the word impossible, thought you would want to know. You point out a very good situation which I need to be careful to lightly or as little as possible over use, so I should very carefully read and reread your word about word art.   FIRST IMPRESSIONS You presented the information well, left in a few typos or mistakes, and gave examples and links which I will research and most likely find very, very valuable and useful, Thank you  I LIKE What and why: Treasure for me is finding information and examples about how I can improve my writing and presentation skills so that the reader is a part of the events and actions rather than being told about what is happening. Joy and glad feelings abound because I found this information. I appreciate your care and details you injected into your work as you wrote about writing better and how to rearrange a sentence so it shows the reader and invites the reader which results in the reader engaged in the events and either less aware he/she is reading or totally unaware he/she is reading. plot: This is a very good plot because oif the challenges of writing to our best abilities. Each time I write, I do my very best to create the most wonderful word art possible. Word art for me is the creating of a picture in the readers mind so that the reader has the experience of watching and/or being involved with the scenes completely and easily. Reading your information was involving me as a student and writer in the process of being reminded about what words should be used lightly, how to rearrange sentences, and what to think about during the editing process. Now that I've read your instructions, examples, and know there is much work to do, I want to reread your word art, study the information which the links will reveal to me, and start practicing a better way to write. This is an exciting and educational plot! The plot words put together correctly and some left out appropriately is a challenge which I full intend to meet and expect to successfully conquer as I practice mindfully my writing. Rhythm: rhythm depends upon the subject matter, the reader, and how the reader responds to what was written. When I started reading your writing, the rhythm was slow and steady, however as I realized the treasures within the content, I started feeling excited and had the urge to pay very close attention to what your writing was conveying to me. The urge to move faster to the next group of words which would unleash more information which I treasured, gave me reason to read a little fasted, but not so fast that I would miss important facts. When I needed to slow down or read faster I made the appropriate changes, so the rhythm was a mixture of different speeds, Your words were easy to read and understand so I had no bumps along the way. There was no choppiness to the way the words and sentences were written in my opinion.  OBSERVATION(S) I expect because of the information you shared with me, I will be a better writer; practice makes perfect.  QUESTION(S) I do not have any questions right now, perhaps later I may have something to ask you.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: Please keep writing and sharing you knowledge about writing, much thanks. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: I know that I for one still use these too much, so I thought I'd put this together as a way to remind myself of ways to reword my sentences and get better in this area. I know that I for one-for one what? second, minute? still use these too much, so I thought I'd put this together as a way to remind myself of ways to reword my sentences and get better in this area. Because I know I still use...or better would be: I thought I'd put this together as a way to remind myself of ways to reword my sentences so that...or, Reminding myself and sharing this information with you...These are the ideas which went through my head as I thought about a more interesting and engaging way to state your thoughts. Including the links is a great idea which works well within your content.  CONCLUSION(S) My thoughts and Impressions: Sharing the information and allowing me to review for you has helped me with my reading and writing which I appreciate. Please continue to read, write, and share your treasures. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"    Paper Doll Gang review, "Invalid Item" especially for you.   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"    The "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" are out in force today raiding the ports of WDC for WDC 13th anniversary! Please enjoy!  Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item"  Join us for some coffee and conversation in the "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.  ** Image ID #1533880 Unavailable ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" The WDC Army Angels  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !  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