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| (4.5)| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: FishbonesThis could be a bit fishy, yet the bones may have a story to tell, so I decided to investigate further to uncover what may be inside your word art. Description: The train has left the station. I am gone.Which adds to the mystery of what this poem is all about, so I liking mysteries, have to read your poem and discover the meaning and other interesting aspects of your writing.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS Your poem has an interesting new word and usage of this word.  I LIKE What and why: I learned about a new word, Bladderwrack, which I looked up doing a search for the meaning using my computer. From what I was able to find, this a brown, species of seaweed, true? as far as I can tell, you used it correctly in writing, and for what you used this word for to convey meaning in your poem. My favorite part of your poem is the third verse because of the way it rhymes, the words go together and work well to convey and give meaning which for me gives me no doubt what your word art is all about. I believe according to this verse more than any other your poem is about you leaving earth, dying and moving on to whatever is next. Or this is a death of your life or someone elses life meaning the possibility that the changes is a life style change. It is possible to see another possibility for me, a spiritual change. plot: When I think about my previous statements, I also can add that along with the above information, your plot in this poem has interest and is great because of the many ways you explain the departing process. In the first verse I take the rainy day to be the day people cry for you or a departed someone. Or possibly actual rain and you want to move to a better climate, which could be somewhere that has no rain like not on earth. A fictional place perhaps. Also my spirit is calm, yet feeling that this poem represents your thoughts on death, the dying process, and what you know and imagine world happen when this event becomes reality for you or someone. Nothing is on, yet the television plays is a challenging part of the poem for me, unless and this just came to me, it is a situation of someone still alive and not able to respond to people and the world because of injury or illness. My thoughts have gone as far as I can follow and I am out of possible ways to find new ideas and figure out more of the meaning of your words. I wonder if indeed you have written this poem in such a way that the reader may take from your words and create different meanings depending on their ability to explore and define the scope and depth of this poetry in action? Rhythm: I am learning slowly about poetry and have found this writing intrieging, mysterious, and a brain teaser because my mind had brought out several possible situations for considering the meaning and actual story which you have written about and shared with me. The rhythm for some of this poem si smooth and I am able to glide from one word to another without any trouble. In other places, I seem to stumble which breaks the rhythm. This may be because this poem is free verse and I am accustom to poetry which rhymes regularly at regular intervals. Rhythm is something I am challenged with when reading your poem, so any help with this is greatly appreciated, thank you.  OBSERVATION(S) I enjoy mystery and poetry and your poem for me has both.   QUESTION(S) Your title uses (Fishbones} and in your poem you use {fish bones,}. Is your title a typo, misspelling on purpose for special meaning, or is fish bones different for the same or similar reasons? According to my spell checker, (Fishbones} is not correct.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: You write well and I appreciate what you have created. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: my adventure reading your poem has been a challenging journey and education that has taught me the new word and that I have a huge amount to learn about poetry and reading and reviewing.  CONCLUSION(S) My thoughts and Impressions: Thank you for sharing your poem and allowing me to review for you. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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