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 |  | Over The Ocean  [13+] A poem about depression.  |
| (4.5)| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Over The OceanYou must have a love of and much joy when you write poetry because you have many, many poems in your portfolio. Over the ocean gave me the thought of you across the ocean and so, I thought I would reach out to you again and have another go at reviewing more poetry. Description: A poem about depression. Quickly grabbed my attention and even though I've reviewed writing about depression, I havn't reviewed nor read writing in poetry from about depression. Another reason this drew me toward this particular writing is that my sister is currently dealing with depression and is taking medicine. I thought i would be able to relate to your poem and perhaps learn more about your writing style and depression.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS I believe I have a better understanding about this poem and what you are writing.  I LIKE What and why: The last verse which shows me you are at whits end, people you thought were your friends, and stitches you can not mend is something I can relate to because I has similar experiences more because of my limited vision (legally blind) and not having the knowledge, experience, and believing what I was told as a child and young adult. My life and I suspect yours would have been different had we not had experiences which we could not or did not have the ability to change. My guess is that you and I had we been allowed or been able to know of different ways and things to try, we may have been able to accomplish things that we thought were impossible. Therefore we may have had or been able to take advantage of more and different opportunities and challenges giving us strength and vision to do things very differently. I feel as though I was told lies not on purpose but because people didn't have faith and believe I could try to do something and either succeed or fail, yet still have balance. I was protected and often people thought I couldn't or shouldn't be able to try doing something. Do you think you were stifled because of peoples perception of what you could or couldn't do or handle? My sister has poor self esteem, yet from your writing, I do not see you with this kind of thinking because you are writing and I feel and read through your words that you have assurance about your abilities to c0onvey to the reader meaning. showing the story well, and knowing that the reader will enjoy and embrace what you are gifting to him or her. As I read your word art and gain a better knowledge of who you are and what you are about, I will be better able to understand and review your writing. plot: Depression isn't a plot that i wouold want to deal with personally, yet learning about it, writing about it, and teaching people about it so that there is much understanding and a discovered known cure would be fine with me. I read from your words that along with depression there is regret. Possibly you show this because it is part of this challenging illness, or chemical imbalance which my sister explained to me is the cause. This plot to my knowledge and from what you write about has many different aspects because depression has many different aspects. What is most important and you show is your forthcoming of truthful feelings , reactions, and how you see things in your world. You have added greatly to my understanding of depression. The baby crying and apparently you avoiding this or not being able to respond is a vivid and bleak situation for you and the baby. The uncertainty, fears, and uncried tears (spell checker indicates this is a misspelling, uncried) gives me indications that here again there is the inability to react or respond to situations. The house and not a home, spending time alone in vacant rooms gives me the idea that you may have been alone even with people still in the house, or that they left you alone. Seeds sown which you reaped from shows me that there was guilt and self dislike for this situation. Endless questions, unfinished tasks, and face with broken mask gives me a picture of not wanting to think about the situation, face the situation, or inability to face the situation or do anything about the situation. I have an understanding of being at whits end because there have been times when I found myself trying to figure out what to do about something and no matter what i was able to think of to try to fix or change things, my situation having multiple disABILITIES didn't or wouldn't allow me to act, so I was stuck with no solutions and no other ideas. I did eventually find a way with the help of friends to get this fixed. Now that I'm back to the frienmd part again, I also think that perhaps it is possible that those whom you thought were your friends and would help or be helpful for and to you turned out to disappoint you because they didn't understand what you were trying to explain and therefore did or acted in away they should not have or, they seemed to be friends then left you or proved they were not your friends by their actions toward you or to your actions and reactions to life and them. Rhythm: I had a smooth reading experience and the rhythm matched the words, lines, and verses of the poem. My spirit was experiencing different reactions as I learned more about this story which matched well the information and so the spiritual rhythm experiences matched the poems rhythm.  OBSERVATION(S) Your poem and I seem to match nicely and be in rhythm with each other.  QUESTION(S) Either this is you writing about you, you writing about your experiences with someone who has had depression, or You write of both as a mother and as a child who has experienced this challenging situation?  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: Whom, there is much about depression which I yet need to learn. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: I had the experience when attending college a few years ago of having stress and I think and believe that this does not help depression go away more help the person dealing with depression. From my experience, stress can cause as much and possibly more challenges because of the physical responses and mental responses the body and brain have to stress. After i finished the smester, I decided that college was stressful enough and I should consider doing something other than attending classes even though I enjoyed learning and the subject matter. I also wasn't able to find financial help, so made peace with this and focused on writing, reviewing, and enjoying writing.com and the other activities on this website.  CONCLUSION(S) College and stress is extremely tough to work through. I know that depression can be even more difficult. It can even be very dangerous to the person with this illness because they could respond to what they see as a useless and needless life, and a life of severe pain life by taking their life. My thoughts and Impressions: I'm glad you shared your writing and how depression had affected you with readers because this will show them and teach them about this challenging situation. You created a very vivid and not co colorful view of living with depression which is realistic and shows and effects of depression to readers, and effects the readers emotionally who relate to your poetry story. Reading and reviewing this poem word art for you has given me a much better idea about the effects and challenges of dealing with depression. I'm glad I was about to give you my thoughts and ideas about your writing as well as share with you some of the ways I was able to relate to your poem. I hope you and people who are having to deal with this will be able to have appropriate and safe medication to help, people who have empathy and understanding, and that you will soon be able to find your way through and out of this depression and have a full and happy life. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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