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| (4.5)| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Changing SheetsI wonder what tid-bits and treasure in may find in the sheets? Description: Entry for "A Moment in Time" Contest.I enjoy reading contest entries, although I like knowing this for a contest, I would have enjoyed knowing what this is about before I decide if I am going to read and review a writers word art.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS I am so thrilled and glad that I read this and am reviewing it for you. Awesome!  I LIKE What and why: I can relate to a simple action, reaction or even the slightest movement causing severe pain and medical troubles. I'm with you all the way physically, spiritually, and medically because I have had a disABILITY all of my life. Now, I have multiple, multiple disABILITIES and medical challenges. I know about being dependent on medical equipment, appliances, and devices because I have some external appliances and some indwelling appliances. Going with these helpers are my indwelling pain pump and catheter which has been surgically implanted into my bladder. I had cataract surgery and a few other surgeries. We seem to have a plethora of common ground with differences and some things we can relate to and discuss well together. plot: Yup, the slightest movement or even sometimes thinking about moving can cause sudden medical changes. This is sometimes how things seem to change for me. I am certain that if you had been given a choice, you would have chosen a different plot. I like this plot because we have a huge amount of common ground, yet both of us I believe did not decide to take this as our first or any choice. I have made peace with my situation and focus on enjoying life. I know the shunt probably is not noticable, yet I believe you think about the possibilities of different things which could happen and manage to keep this in balance so it doesn't consume your every waking day. I have to be careful that my catheter doesn't clog or get twisted. You wrote very clearly and in detail about your medical challenge. I am a detail person and know that some people are squeamish, so am glad you kept the details to only what was absolutely necessary. You probably had a word count limit and had to be very concise and creative with how much you wrote, how you presented and arranged what you wrote, and focused on keeping very close to the subject you wanted to write about. The writing I read shows that you invested a lot of time and effort to write well and follow closely all asoects some I mentioned above to create the best word art possible. Success is yours because you gave me a very clear and colorful picture about changing sheets and having a medical device break and require replacement. Rhythm: Reading your story was a smooth and relaxing experience for me. I did not have to work to figure out what was happening, you showed me and I imagined all of this as if I were watching a movie. There were no pauses or glitches as I read and held onto each word waiting to know about what would happen next. This for me was an adventure. I wouldn't wish this situation on me, you, or anyone else.  OBSERVATION(S) You brought your situation and events to life.  QUESTION(S) How are you? I hope you are well and having no problems medically or other wise. You are welcome to join us "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" whenever you are ready.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: I like the way you explained the details of this story, please keep writing. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: ...surgeries, and having three life threatening diseases. I haven't had any more revisions since then. surgeries, and three life threatening diseases. I have recovered and there have been no more problems. I thought I would share this change in your story because this may give some ideas you want to edit into your story or use in other stories. Your writing voice is very nice and your writing has life and promise.  CONCLUSION(S) I believe you are a survivor, have strength and courage, and with the help of our heavenly father will have a very good life with medical challenges that God will help you work through. My thoughts and Impressions: We didn't meet here by accident. I believe we met because of divine appointment. Thank you for sharing your writing, story, and details about changing the McGoo sheets onto your bed so that they would be fresh. It was unfortunate that the connector poped. God must have used this event to protect you from huge damage because if the pop hadn't happened them the shunt and connectors would have possibly been the cause of infection which would have been more difficult to eradicate as it quickly spread through out your body slowly and surely made you extremely sick. I've heard of people who had something leak and not knowing. This caused death or major massive medical troubles. Reading and reviewing for was well worth doing because I learned about you and got to know you better through your story, word art which is how you used and placed your words to create a word picture. Thank you for sharing your writing with me and allowing me to read and review for you. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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