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 |  | Anointed To Prepare The Next Generation  [13+] Elder Principle 1 - Stand In The Fire and Prepare the Next Generation of Servants  |
| (4.5)| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Anointed To Prepare The Next GenerationI must read because it is the next generation which is necessary to continue the work and forward the salvation and redemption of His remnant. Description: Elder Principle 1 - Stand In The Fire and Prepare the Next Generation of Servants This sounds very serious, so I must read and hold onto every word. I have no doubt that God lead me to this writing.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS Nicely written history and thoughts about the future of Gods plan.  I LIKE What and why: Your writing brings to life and shows the events which God used to fulfill the scriptures and continue His plan of redemption. My spirit is full of joy and lifted up because you shared with readers about what scripture shows happened for the people to enter the promised land. The title and description gave me the idea that this writing would have information about the next generation being molded and shaped in today's time. I didn't expect this to show the history and events leading up to actually entering the promised land in the old testament. I am pleased to write that this is important and relevant for today because it is a preparation of servants for today and the future days for showing people the way to salvation. Your writing is clear and shows the events and activities leading from day 410, the murmuring, and the response from God, and how Moses prayed and asked for mercy for the people, and what happened so that there would be a new generation who would be prepared to enter the promised land. plot: The plot is completely divine intervention which I hold near and dear to my heart and enjoy reading. I read scripture each day and refuse to go to bed without having read scripture. You took this plot and wrote your version of the story in a way which makes reading these events like reading a story that is condensed, understandable, and easy to follow from scene to scene. Rhythm: As I read your word art, I had no major problems with the rhythm of this story. The words worked well together. Moving from sentence to sentence was a smooth process. I do not plan to check each fact in scripture with each fact in your story. I believe it is sufficient for the reader to have a basic understanding of these events and then to have the desire for reading for themselves what is written in scripture.  OBSERVATION(S) Sharing what God would have you share with people is the very best way to reach out and invite someone to have a relationship with God, Jesus, and the Holy Ghost.  QUESTION(S) Did you check any other versions of scripture?  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: You write well and express and show the events of this story nicely and effectively. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: They wretched out their grief to God I looked for usage of this word,wretched, in the online dictionaries and was not able to find an example of this word being used in the way you chose to use it for the sentence in your story. I did fine many examples of proper usage for, wretched, in the online dictionaries. Adding ed to this word makes it past tense, so perhaps changing the sentence to allow this word to work better may help your writing work more smoothly in this sentence. I suggest: They wretched, murmured in grief to God This isn't exactly the sentence of words I had in mind to share with you, however, I hope this will help. As usual Moses was praying with ferocity to God for mercy. Over a million Israelites had become an abomination to God. And Moses too was nearly to the edge of insanity. Placing the two sentences about Moses would help with the continuity of what is happening. Over a million Israelites had become an abomination to God. As usual Moses was praying with ferocity to God for mercy for the people. Moses was nearly pushed to the edge of insanity because of the murmuring and dissension among the people of God who should know better than to test their living and powerful (heavenly father) or you could write (God). The blue color which you use for this writing is ok, however, it would be much easier for me to read what you wrote if the color were black, brown, or some very dark color. I wish we could change the background colors and font colors for our writings and also for the purpose of making it easier for each of us to be able to more easily read what writers have written.  CONCLUSION(S) I have enjoyed reading this powerful story and the events you tell about in your story. My thoughts and Impressions: For me you are a soldier in Gods army who is bold and willing to share scripture to many people. I have joy and peace because you write for God and His plan of redemption and salvation for the generations. Thank you very much for sharing your word art with me and allowing me to review for you. I wish you safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/10/2014 @ 12:42pm EDT