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| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: DEAR DADDY, I STILL MISS YOUI miss my parents also, so can relate which is why I am interested in reading this story. Your title shows your love and how you miss your father through the words and arrangement of these words. It got my attention. Description: Those who have read my life stories will understand the depth of my forgiveness and love I have to get to understand and know what this is all about, so will read your story.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS I'm stunned because of the out pouring of love, loss, truth, and spiritual essence which is intertwined into the message you wrote to your father. This is what I see, feel, and my spirit caught as I read your writing.  I LIKE What and why: You wrote as if your father was sitting in front of you or beside you listening to each word you had for him. Your longing for him to be with you and converse is very strong and evident through your words. It is obvious that you have a very strong and never ending love for your father regardless of the good, bad, or indifferent actions he may have taken. I believe that He did everything He knew and could to be the very best father possible to your family as well as the best husband possible to your mother. I can tell that even when you may have disappointed him or did something which he totally disagreed with< he still totally loved you. Reading your words for me was like being invited to a very special conversation between you and your father and knowing only what you had to say. I can imagine that He would respond to you with love, encouragement, direction, and all that he knew you needed to make the right choices and have a wonderful life. There is a lot here to like. plot: A wonderful plot overflowing with Gods divine guidance and loving kindness. I understand and can relate to your change of direction about the organized religions we have today. Your honesty and thoughts about this you could have omitted, however this would take away from the true relationship between you and your father. Your father gave you courage and wisdom to make the challenging decisions and tell the truth even when you and the rest of your family may have faced severe criticism or worse. I appreciate knowing about the difficult issues and challenges as well as the fun and wonderful times. This story has balance and is full of love and many ingredients which many families relations lack today. It is good that you shared all of this story with readers who care to read your awesome words. Rhythm: I had a calm relaxed feeling as I read your word art. The setting and choice of words, length of sentences, and presentation gave this writing peace, joy, love, and easy enjoyable transition from word to word, sentence, and event to event from beginning to the ending. I was involved with each scene and not focused on the fact that I was reading. I could feel and sense that each word was like a hug for your father and that it also was a piece of the picture you were showing the reader.  OBSERVATION(S) I believe that your father is waiting for you and as he waits, he is watching over you.  QUESTION(S) How are you? I hope you are doing ok. You seem to have a talent for writing and I was wondering how you decide upon the structure of a story, which words and order of words you will use, and the characters and plot? I know you write much about true events, and so much of this question is focused on fiction.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: Please continue to share your word art with readers. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: I would call this word of art a master piece. I enjoyed being involved with all of this story. You showed the details of your word picture well and gave me a close up look into your special relationship with your father. I suggest that you please consider looking through this master piece and making it super master piece by changing some of the words you at the beginning of the sentences so that there is less repetition.  CONCLUSION(S) Word art is a picture created with words and you created a wonderful picture. My thoughts and Impressions: Many thanks for sharing your writing with me and allowing me to review for you. My spirit is joyous and uplifted because of your love for your father. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/05/2014 @ 12:54am EST