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| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: A Cat In AutumnCat! Oh, gotta read about the cat! I can not resist, I must read about the cat. I have three cats and I've got to know about this cats' hunt. Description: In autumn, a cat's hunt is rudely interrupted. She takes this very personally.This seems exciting and to be quite the adventure. I'm especially drawn to wanting to know about the cat taking this interruption very personally because I have been studying animal behavior for many years and am looking for additional information regularly.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS Wow, what fun for the cat at least in the end. Great story of people, animals, and challenges.  I LIKE What and why: The twitching of the cat tail I could picture easily because I have three cats and have witnessed this action many times. The part about many mice in the leaf pile and the cat stalking with delight is another word picture which I can picture and enjoy. The way you described the scenes and characters gave me a good idea about the emotions and reactions which were happening. This was very helpful and it also helped the characters become more alive and real to me. Near and dear to my heart is the closeness of the family. I believe the cat too would love to be closer to her family members if they would respect that she is an independent spirit and needs to have her space occasionally. They worked to gether raking the leaves which as far as I can tell many families do not take advantage of spending this valuable time together doing group activities. I'm glad and happy that you told about this scene because family unites are extremely important. plot: Your choice of characters made this story interesting because of the actions and reactions were much like we would react only these reactions and actions belonged to the animals as they were what an animal may do. The though process definitely was human, yet it worked well with the rest of the story. For me it was a lot like animal costumes warn by humans as they mimicked animal behavior. I have this response to your story because I've studied dog psychology and other animal psychologies most of my life therefore my view is different from many readers. The plot is very good because each individual had a task to do and they set about working on their task willingly or at least because it was a matter of survival. Adding this treasure in the story will help people realize that they can do much together and accomplish many things provided they work as a family unit. Even though squirrels seem to be working independently, they indirectly help each other because they often find food during winter that another squirrel put away for the tough times ahead. It's nice when people work together. Rhythm: The relaxed smoothness of your story was a pleasure and enjoyable to read. I can not imagine this story written any other way.  OBSERVATION(S) I can tell you have a special place in your heart for animals.  QUESTION(S) I wonder why you decided to tell the story rather then show the story? For me, it is nice and interesting, however, showing may help bring these characters and events into a very colorful and personal situation with their environment. The narrative works and it is totally your choice, I was curious.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: Nice and cute family story which brings to the front of the situation that cooperation is very beneficial, and the family unit is extremely important. I appreciate that you wrote this story because it is similar to how animals work together and people work together as a family. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: Her indignation is doubled when the dog decides to relieve himself at the base of her pine tree. Seeing the dog, relieve himself at the base of her pine tree, the orange tabby is furiously indignant. When you show the reader the story, it helps to change the readers focus from being aware that he/she is reading to focusing on the characters and activity. I am able to follow what is happening and can imagine the idea of the events, however by changing the word order and presentation, you will be able to bring the reader into the story so that he/she feels like they are participating rather than watching as a spectator.  CONCLUSION(S) Keep the stories coming and please share them with readers because you have interesting plots, characters and events. My thoughts and Impressions: Reading your story and enjoying the adventure of family members is great fun and shows the importance of group efforts. My spirit is uplifted because you emphasized the family unit. Thank you for sharing your word art with me and allowing me to review for you. Write with might for readers delight. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/05/2014 @ 7:19pm EST