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| (4.5)| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: The resurrection of CokeI like coke although try not to drink too much of this bubblie soft drink, so had to discover what this is about. Description: {iDad's dog who died. His name was Coke. He lived again. Word count 794}I remember a story about a dog who was in need of intervention to be put to sleep and even with extra blue juice as it was called, the dog lived, so I absolutely must read this short story about Coke. I have a service dog. Dogs are always companions in my life in some way or other, so this story is an adventure in finding out about Coke and what happened to him and after the resurrection.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS Awesome wonderful story and a well protected dog because God knew how to take good care of His creature.  I LIKE What and why: I suspected that Coke had been kicked severely and yet perhaps it happened so suddenly that he was relaxed enough to noe have serious injuries. I'm glad my suspicion was correct. This made the story suspenseful, yet there was the possibility for hope and a happy ending. I can understand and relate to the loss of a beloved dog, so I have a good idea through your words and from my experience what your father went through when he lost Doug and when he thought he lost Coke. When Coke returned to his position near the hoof of the horse, it must have required him to do so running to get caught up, so I wonder how serious the injury may have been and how Coke managed to cope with the situation? I guess this mystery will remain with Coke because he isn't going to tell us in English. I do like mysteries, so this makes the story more interesting. plot: This is a wonderful and fantastic plot because it is about two dogs, a horse, and has some mystery weaved into this adventure which will most likely not be known unless Coke learns to speak English. My guess is that a Kelpie is either the Australian Cattle dog or a similar close relative because when I researched this breed I saw a picture of a dog that looked like the Australian Cattle dog. I remember the Dingo, the Australian shepherd, and the Australian cattle dog. I've had the two domestic breeds years ago. I can understand and relate to the need to work, their toughness, and their determination and tenacity to get the job done. You showed through telling your story these traits for Coke very well. The way you presented the story with your unique writing voice and using colorful words in the right order the right way gave this story it's charm and native accent. You created a wonderful written picture through your word art of special characters and a superbly special event for Coke to rise again. I enjoyed the characters which you gave life to and showed their individuality so that they could be introduced to the reader as if they were face to face. Rhythm: Presenting the story was in a relaxed and easy going manner which I could enjoy and have my focus on meeting the characters, viewing the events as if I were watching a movie, and not feel like I had to rush this experience. I was not focused on the reading as much as i felt like I was in the story as someone going through these events.  OBSERVATION(S) It is sad that Doug was bitten by a snake and lost his life.  QUESTION(S) I wonder, did your father think to check if Coke was still breathing after he had been kicked? It is possible that he may have been breathing so shallow that it may have appeared as if he was not alive.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: I very much enjoyed meeting some of your family and getting to know you and them through your word art (writing). My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: That one was bitten by a snake and by the time Dad climbed off his stock horse and grabbed the dog, spun him around by the tail thinking it was a bait, he'd already died. For me, this sentence is a bit confusing, so I thought I'd rewrite it and see if I can figure it out. Please let me know if I got the idea and understand the meaning of the sentence. That one was bitten by a snake I would write, Doug was bitten by a snake or the first dog was bitten by a snake. After this sentence, I would start a new sentence. And, by the time Dad climbed off his stock horse and grabbed the dog, spun him around by the tail thinking it was a bait, he'd already died. What is bait? Is this a typo? If not, bait, is like bait for catching something?  CONCLUSION(S) I hope you continue to write word art (stories) and other items for readers, they're/it is very good and I enjoyed reading this one. My thoughts and Impressions: Do you have any more animal stories? If so wonderful. If not, please write some and I'll be glad to read them. Much thanks for sharing your word art with me, allowing me to review for you, and giving me the chance to get to know you trough your writing. Safe travels and many blessings This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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