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 This is My Story  [E]
The story of how I learned love is selfless.
by Lexie.K
Review of This is My Story  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, Lexie.K . My name is Charlie and I’m happy to be reviewing your poem that I found on the "Read a Newbie" page. Thank you for sharing with us and giving me this opportunity to review. The following are just my personal opinions as a reader. I am not a professional. If you find something useful, awesome! If not, feel free to dismiss this. *Cool*



*Questiono* Title

*Infoo* The title make sense because the poem is your story. It's somewhat nonspecific in nature, but after reading through the poem, I can see why you called it that.

*Questionb* Subject Matter and Theme

*Infob* This poem is about understanding when to let someone go because they're happier without you. It's hard to realize that someone's picturesque life doesn't include you, but if you truly care about the person, you let them go be happier elsewhere. What is that saying? "If you love someone, let them go."


*Questionp* Flow and Readability

*Infop* I didn't have an issue with the readability of the poem. It was easy to comprehend the situation that you were going through. This is a free verse poem with no rhyming pattern.


*Questiong* Tone and Imagery

*Infog* I like that you set out a scene for the reader. I can see this playing out in my mind. You're walking and see this guy laughing happily and it makes you happy. But then you see that he is so happy because he is with a girl that isn't you. Now you have the decision of being happy for him even if he doesn't want you or being jealous and miserable because he doesn't want that relationship to be with you.


*Questionv* Possible Suggestions

*Infov* The biggest issue I took with this poem is the flow. Even though it doesn't have a rhyming pattern, I still think it could have a little more rhythm. When I was reading it, it felt sort of like reading a short essay or a short story. It doesn't read like a poem when I read it out loud.


*Questionr* Final Thoughts

*Infor* I think you have a good topic here to write about. A lot of people will be able to relate to the situation and enjoy reading about something like this. My only suggestion would be to work on the rhythm so that it reads a little more smoothly. Thanks again for sharing with us!


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