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| (4.0)| Hello Mothermouse--come visit me  :  I have the honor of reviewing your writing for "Simply Positive Review Forum " . Please remember I am a writer, who, like yourself, is also reviewed by her peers; therefore, I know what it feels like! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!  TITLE The title of your poem is very fitting! Great job on the title!   SPELLING, GRAMMAR, & PUNCTUATION Regarding spelling, grammar and punctuation, I could find no errors.  POETRY FORM, RHYME, & RHYTHMThis poem is written as a quatrain and it follows the form perfectly throughout. Very good!  FAVORITE PARTS I enjoyed the entire poem, but let me tell about a few of my favorite parts: *stargray* Dirt dust and, grit I want to keep out But still we track it on all the floors. - I CHOSE THIS LINE BECAUSE EVERYONE KNOWS THAT NO MATTER HOW HARD YOU TRY IT SEEMS THAT YOU CAN NEVER KEEP THE DIRT OUT, RIGHT? GREAT JOB! *stargray* I look around and no way will I mess it up. For one more time it's take out or go out. I can't put down not even one dirty cup. - I CHOSE THESE LINES BECAUSE I KNOW THIS FEELING, TOO. YOU JUST DON'T WANT TO MAKE A MESS ONCE IT LOOKS SO NICE. GOOD JOB. *stargray* "Yes, I know," I say. "But it's so lovely. I want to enjoy it for one day more."{/l} - I CHOSE THIS LINE BECAUSE IT IS THE PERFECT ENDING FOR YOUR POEM AND IT MADE ME GRIN. GREAT JOB!  OVERALL RATING/FINAL THOUGHTS I gave this poem an overall rating of  for its creativity, originality, and the ability to make me grin. Everyone knows that feeling of inconvenience when there's remodeling going on in your house. It is such a pain, isn't it? And then the feeling of relief and happiness when it's all over. But somehow, even though you finally have things just the way you want them, you can't bring yourself to mess everything up, even though the kitchen is supposed to be utilized. This made me grin, because I could understand your reluctance. Good job with this poem. Overall, a very good effort! You keep writing and I'll keep reading. Please continue to share with our community. Thank you for allowing me to review your work. I consider it an honor and a privilege! Have a  lovely  day! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .Cindy  ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/10/2014 @ 10:59pm EDT