Hello Young_Writer,
I am reading all the entrants to the Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest and reviewing those that catch my eye.

What I liked about Death: I have had similar ponderings regarding the state of death and feelings...I wrote about it some years back in a short prose titled Drowning a Ghost. But not to toot my own horn. I enjoyed reading another perspective along the same theme.

Another thing I liked was all of the fifth stanza--Yes, indeed. The idea is to escape emotional pain NOT feel it for eternity.

what I least liked: The ending. I identified with the sentiment. I think it was too abrupt or something--the rhythm of the last lines didn't mesh well with the rest of the poem.

Overall, the message of your poem is effective with the message that death may not be the escape expected or yearned for. Thank-you for sharing.
Good Luck in the contest.